This the evolution of the first line of my newest Karen Wilson Chronicles background story. I don’t know if the last version of the sentence is the final version but I’m happy with it right now.
The meeting place was a large, unnatural boulder. (Too passive.)
They met in the shadow of a large, unnatural boulder. (Active. Better but who is “they”?)
The Grey Lady and Sees-the-Wind met in the shadow of a large, unnatural boulder. (Good. Who is meeting but why?)
The Grey Lady and Sees-the-Wind met in the shadow of a large, unnatural boulder on the anniversary of the Pact. (Better but… meh.)
The Grey Lady and Sees-the-Wind met in the shadow of a large, unnatural boulder that marked the beginning of the Pact between the Makah tribe and the Fair Folk. (Great. Who, where, why, culture.)